Friday, 1 June 2018

week five term 2!


this week for writing, Mr. Wood told us to try and write a 50 word story. I found this really fun because I already had an idea of what I was going to write in my head. my first try had 79 words which is very far from 50 :") because it was so long, I had to try and shorten it. it was very hard to get rid of words and make it 50 words long and I only managed to get rid of 10. Here are my first and second tries!


this week we also did a lot of maths work. I learnt how to subtract and add fractions. here is a slide with how to do subtraction with fractions!!


  1. I love your piece of flash fiction! Keep writing!!

  2. You can further reduce the word count by replacing adj+adv combinations with more descriptive single verbs. For example, instead of "staring excitedly" you can say "gawking".

    Also, great bit of writing. The "twist" at the end made me smile. ☺

  3. Good job Hannah! Loved it! Could not wait for the part to get to the end to find out what's in the letter! You certainly have a gift!Helen

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  5. Mrs Bellis10 August 2018 at 06:30
    Kia ora Hannah. I really enjoyed you 50 words piece of writing. Even more so, the 2.0 version. I really like how you changed the order of your words to create more interesting sentences (and cut the words down). Keep writing and keep sharing! Ka pai tau mahi tuhia.

  6. What a great piece of writing Hannah. The plot twist at the end made me laugh. It was so funny and clever! Keep up the great work. Looking forward to reading more in the future!


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